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-----"Good, gracious!" Rarity said aloud as she finished making Fluttershy's new dress, "This has to be the best dress I've ever made! Don't you think it's just FABULOUS?" She asked Fluttershy's head, which was sitting on a post on her table.

-----"MA-ROW!" Pearlescence said as she entered the room.

-----"I SHOULD make all of my friends dresses just like this, shouldn't I?" Rarity said excitedly, her face brighter than ever, "Oh, we would be ALL the rage at the Gala. I simply can-NOT wait until Twilight gets here so I can tell her my idea.

-----Rarity spent the next hour preparing for Twilight's arrival. She moved all of her ponyquins into an un-used room, placed Fluttershy's dress on one, and covered it with a blanket. 'I wish Twilight would hurry up and get here, already, she just HAS hear my new idea, I just KNOW she's going to love it, Rarity thought as she paced back and forth across the room.

-----After what Rarity thought of as hours, but was in reality, only around 15 minutes, there was a knock on Rarity's door. "Oh, finally," Rarity said to herself, "I'll be right there!" Rarity ran to the door, very excited about what she was going to do with all of her friend's dresses.

-----She opened the door to see Twilight. "Twilight, my dear, you're just in time!" she said as she opened the door wider to let her in, "I just got a GREAT new idea for your dress.

-----Twilight was startled by Rarity's sudden enthusiasm, as previously, she had been quite upset at having to make new dresses. "Wait, you mean you haven't finished it yet?" Twilight asked after regaining her form, "Would you like me to come back later?

-----"Oh, no, no, NOOO, dearie," Rarity said trying to hide her anxiousness, "I need you here to tell me what you think of my new idea!" Rarity began to walk towards the center of the room. When she reached the center, she turned around and pointed toward the newly-decorated room and said, "If you would only step into this room with me, I would gladly show you the new style."

-----Twilight nodded her head at this, and walked into the room. Rarity followed behind her and closed and secretly locked the door once inside. "Oh, you are just going to LOVE my idea, Twilight, we will be ALL the rage at the Gala," Rarity seemed to slip off into a daydream.

-----"Uhh, Rarity..." Twilight stepped over to Rarity and began waving her hoof in front of her face, "Hello? Anybody home?"

-----Rarity regained consciousness after a moment and only stared at Twilight. 'Oh, it's going to be so lonely around here when I'm done,' She thought sadly, 'but it's too late to turn back now, I've already killed my closest friend...' Rarity shook her head when twilight began to look concerned. "Yes, yes... umm... oh, YES, the dress..," Rarity walked over to the ponyquin  covered with a blanket,"I tell you, you are going to LOVE the entire CONCEPT of it."

-----With that, Rarity swiped off the cover over the middle ponyquin to reveal her newest dress. Twilight slowly took in the plain yellow fabric of the dress. She noticed some feathery objects on either side of the dress. "Why did you make Fluttershy's dress the same color as-," Twilight began to say, but stopped as she noticed the slight red tinge under the neck of the dress. She then stood there, mouth agape, as she tried to take it all in.

-----"Yes... the, umm... downside... of making my new dresses is that you don't get to live to wear them..," Rarity struggled to explain as Twilight began to back towards the door, "You might think this whole idea is crazy, but it was FLUTTERSHY that gave me the idea. You see, she insulted me, and I thought that was rather rude. I wanted to make her a dress there was no way she'd feel badly about wearing, so I thought, what better material than her own skin? Who doesn't like wearing their own skin? Oh, and don't bother with the door, dear, I took the liberty of locking that for you," Rarity said the last part as Twilight reached for the door.

-----Twilight's heart sank as she tried the door anyway, and found it to be locked. "Why did you lock the door...?" As she spoke, she began to feel true fear for the first time in her life. Her pupils had trouble becoming the correct size for the lighting of the room, and her body began to quiver slightly. "Why d-did you lock the door?" Twilight repeated when Rarity seemed to go off in a daydream again.

-----Rarity turned to stare blankly at Twilight. "Well," She began, "I need to make all five of you perfect dresses, and I don't think you'd quite like it if you knew I needed to KILL you in order to make it from the start." Rarity picked up the bloody murder weapon from an out of sight table in the corner of the room. She began to walk towards Twilight, slowly opening and closing the scissors, causing dried blood to dislodge itself from the tool.

-----Seeing this, Twilight became filled with even more fear. She opened her mouth to say something, but all that came out was, "Why is the door closed," in a quiet whisper. Twilight began to cry. She tried using her magic to teleport, but she couldn't concentrate on the spell at all. The fear she was feeling stopped her from using magic.

-----"Oh, so you tried to ESCAPE," Rarity said, beginning to get angry, "I go through all the trouble of making all my friends TWO new, beautiful, dresses, and what do I get in return? Not a 'thank you, Rarity', no, I don't get that. I get an INSULT, and an escape attempt," Rarity was now almost upon Twilight, "If I just got some 'thank you's from the first set of dresses, instead of unhappiness, I could've left it at that, but now, I have to kill you."

-----Rarity was now within striking distance, but she faltered. Twilight had began to sob, not even able to support herself, she had fallen to the floor. 'Why couldn't they have done just that... damn you, morality, I don't need to feel this way! Come on, Rarity, it's just one incision.' Rarity thought as she looked at the sad display of Twilight laying on her floor. "Don't worry, I'll make it quick," she said as she took back and plunged the scissors deep into Twilight's left temple.

-----Blood leaked out around the scissors, exiting the open wound. The life faded out of Twilight's eyes, and just before she died, her expression turned to that of content. This took Rarity by surprise, and caused her to freeze for several minutes. Her conscience was deeply affecting her ability to continue production. 'It wasn't so bad when it was Fluttershy, she had insulted me, but Twilight... What had she done? Nothing...'

-----After what seemed like hours, Rarity removed the scissors. She mindlessly began to carry through with the entire process from before. She was slowly going insane. If she made it all the way to Rainbow Dash, there was absolutely no way she would still have any part of a mind left. She began to sing, again, without realizing it, "Twilight's dress... cutting out a pattern snip by snip..."
Rarity decides that since her first pony-skin dress turned out so great, she'd make all of her friends new pony-skin dresses to wear to the Grand Galloping Gala.
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EmoZombie7kya1 Featured By Owner May 31, 2011
purplehayabusa Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Once again.. holy shit. Its amazing writing, but still. Little kid show ponies? cmon.. ah what the hell.. I LOVE IT!!
SwordSparks Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Damn, yes!
Shad-Phoenix Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011
Ooh, she's having doubts. I don't think that she could do it for all of her friends. Maybe Rainbow Dash or Applejack given the right thoughts (they're rather boyish and could look prettier), but it's not in her to kill Pinkie.
hunter78130 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Much better in length than the first one... Any ideas/criticism/other comments are highly appreciated.
undead432 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011
yup, one. teleportation spell is a fear reflex, it's cast only when twilight is afraid, it's not cast by choice.
I would recommend going through the first 4 ponies and then twilight, who of course will escape, and inform Celestia causing rarity to be caught and locked away and then going through how devastated twilight is after what happened and how much she misses her friends, it'll be heartbreaking like spike's story (see old and dying spike story, try searching around 4chan for it if you don't have a copy) or something on these lines.
Except that tiny detail, and taking into consideration that it's an alt art piece, this is outrageous piece of writing (in positive sense). Good job, you're going to drive me bald soon enough.

Excuse me now, i'll have to watch some MLP to release this stress...
hunter78130 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Ugh... I didn't even think about that. I brought this up with one of my friends a few days ago, he suggested something, but I tried to work my way around it... I really never thought about the fact that it's fear induced though...
hunter78130 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
As soon as I posted that, I realized. Yes, it IS cast by choice. In episode 2, Applebuck Season, Twilight constantly displays how lazy she is by repeatedly teleporting in front of Applejack. Also, moments of intense fear, such as realizing that one of her closest friends, Fluttershy, is dead, and was killed by ANOTHER of her closest friends, are not put into the show. Therefore, I feel that I have the right of way in leaving that as is.
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave a comment including something that I needed to explain, and also thank you for the compliment. I have part 3 on paper and may upload it by tomorrow morning.

TR signing off!
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